FMB: Chapter 3 - 1/3 done!

[lavanya_six]

This draft is looking pretty solid. It's nearly double the length of previous ones, weighing in at a hefty 5900 words so far. I've managed to incorporate pieces from nearly every previous draft in a non-sucky (I hope) way. The thing I'm happiest about is that I've finally managed to juggle the six characters present for the Iroh/Toph mutual verbal smackdown.

Now I just need to write the big Iroh/Toph fight sequence, the Aang/Zuko fight, and then wrap everything up. Needless to say, Chapter 3 is going to be damn big.
 

On a completely unrelated note, here's some awesome fanart that has Zuko and Aang taking bongs hits.

Comments

[martikhoras.livejournal.com]

Well its likely the cracky exuberance. Toph's larger than life do anything attitude and persona are just that. A persona. Moreover underneath that is someone who is honestly haunted.

The new garden scene for instance or the fact she's still catching up to Piandao, a mere mortal. The fact she's been right about Aang... and wrong (the elctrons weren't cold from broadcast before people were "speculating" Aang wasn't a 'real' master but go to Zuko and he's a ninja, translator, statesman, master tactician, and a poet because all samurai are and Zuko is totally like that...)

At the same time Aang can't handle himself in a battle like Toph but she admits his potential and accomplished expertise (something she never does in canon... for anyone) he has thoughts and ideas indicative of maturity and depth (beyond is horndogging and needy for Katara not even Stormbenders managed that).

The story is centered on Toph but she isn't the voice of credibility. I don't think its a deconstruction. Just playing an idea with depth and straightness but with cracky exuberance.

I would compare it to Elements of War in that regard. Crazy idea but well excuted with fair consideration and interesting mash ups. I don't get Toph's deal with her family though. Not yet anyway.