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FMB: 1 of 5 has been converted.... Yaaay?
Apr. 10th, 2010 08:26 pmGot the beta for Chapter 1 back, along with an asskicking by my trusty beta on the fine aspects of swordsmithing. After much revision, Chapter 1 was made more presentable. I also changed it to past tense because trying to write long-form fanfic in present tense MAKES LAVANYA GO CRAZY. Chapter 1.1 is now back to the beta for a final check.
I've had several false starts on Chapter 2, mostly due to an underlying problem that didn't crystallize for me until I re-read a comment by clockworkchaos in a previous post about wanting to see an 22!Toph/Iroh conversation. See, in the original draft, Iroh was dead by the start of the story. Long story short, I junked the highly AU aspects of the first draft and lined it up more with canon. So now things run essentially the same for everyone until Toph joins the Gaang. ("Three-fourths of the Fire Nation's royal family in one small, deserted town? No one told me it was my birthday!") Because someone calling Iroh on his past deeds was too good a story element to pass up. Plus leaving Iroh alive puts the focus on Toph's war trauma and not on her relationship with her parents, which, over the course of writing the first chapter, I found the former was more important.
I extended the outline to 5 chapters total, because I couldn't make the Ba Sing Se arc work in one chapter.
(I also have this weird idea for an omake which mashes up TMB!Toph, FFO!Katara, genderbent!Sokka and firebender!Suki in one story. But that madness willwait for another day never happen.)
I've had several false starts on Chapter 2, mostly due to an underlying problem that didn't crystallize for me until I re-read a comment by clockworkchaos in a previous post about wanting to see an 22!Toph/Iroh conversation. See, in the original draft, Iroh was dead by the start of the story. Long story short, I junked the highly AU aspects of the first draft and lined it up more with canon. So now things run essentially the same for everyone until Toph joins the Gaang. ("Three-fourths of the Fire Nation's royal family in one small, deserted town? No one told me it was my birthday!") Because someone calling Iroh on his past deeds was too good a story element to pass up. Plus leaving Iroh alive puts the focus on Toph's war trauma and not on her relationship with her parents, which, over the course of writing the first chapter, I found the former was more important.
I extended the outline to 5 chapters total, because I couldn't make the Ba Sing Se arc work in one chapter.
(I also have this weird idea for an omake which mashes up TMB!Toph, FFO!Katara, genderbent!Sokka and firebender!Suki in one story. But that madness will
